To call my big love

croient moi mes amis ,j'écris ce poems avec bcp de douleurs ,et c'étais trés difficile de faire sortir des sentiments qui datent de qlq années ....mais à la fin j'ai été étonné car j'ai fait un style de poésie que j'ai jamais utilisé nchallah ya3jebkom ...je vx bcp de commentaire pour celui là ok

At night I pray
I close my eyes
I see your face
Afraid to go away

the pain is hard
the pain ,it kills
I can't hold on
you changed my heart

you were the one here
I was wainting there
where we used to stay
without your eyes
I can't see clear

why can't we forgive
did you forget
I still believe
you wouldn't leave

I saw your eyes
they holded tears
you broke my breaths
I forgot the lies
you knew my fears

our love was strong
I need you dear
how could you live
without me ,without the song
we used to hear

I guess I'll die
why can't you feel
I guess you're gone
it's a dream ,but so real

written by madonne481 , 10/ 09/2009 15 h

tjrs kima el3ada ,c moi le premeir à poster 1 commentaire ..... winkom mes amis sur pharmaland ..............je veux tes commentaires ........si je poste mes poems ,c pour les partager avec vous

it's so amazing

Citation :

without your eyes
I can't see clear

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I still believe
you wouldn't leave

I saw your eyes
they holded tears
you broke my breaths
I forgot the lies
you knew my fears

our love was strong
I need you dear
how could you live
without me ,without the song
we used to hear

I guess I'll die
why can't you feel
I guess you're gone
it's a dream ,but so real

just a big wow ! it's really very nice !
hope see other poem for you ,)

tnx so much friends !!!

j'adore aussi
bravo

Merci Parano c gentil de ta part

Hello MDN
Hee i'm turning pages in pharmaland to read more of your work
I really Like the piece, it shows a srtong and hard feeling
but I think the piece is not really adjusted
I mean the rhymes are kinda going up and downs
however this part is really really wonderful!!

our love was strong
I need you dear
how could you live
without me ,without the song
we used to hear

I liked your way using "we used to"
cause it's rarely when we use "used to" in poetry
it gave a charm to the piece

Jane a écrit:

Hello MDN
Hee i'm turning pages in pharmaland to read more of your work
I really Like the piece, it shows a srtong and hard feeling
but I think the piece is not really adjusted
I mean the rhymes are kinda going up and downs
however this part is really really wonderful!!

our love was strong
I need you dear
how could you live
without me ,without the song
we used to hear

I liked your way using "we used to"
cause it's rarely when we use "used to" in poetry
it gave a charm to the piece

hi Jane ,tnx so much ...I think this is the most powerful poem I've ever written...it's really from the deep of my heart ...

for the ryhme : you have to know ,that there's not one type of rhyme ,actually there're so manay types ...and in that style of poem ,the rhyme is really adjusted ...you saw it not adjusted cause you search in every part seperately OK ,jsut look at the poem from a zoom ++++ then you'll see

j'ai aimé beaucoup ce poéme,merci Madonne

andromede a écrit:

j'ai aimé beaucoup ce poéme,merci Madonne

never mind andromede u're welcome