MY HEART IS NOT FOR SALE

Holding my heart in my hands
And bleeding tears
God what I'm going to do
First I bought love
Now I'm buying fears

Listen !I'm not afraid
I'm not afraid to chose
I'm telling all the world
my heart is not for sale
it's My blood or my word

Go you are free
let me breake the ice
and take your dirty money
I'm ready to sacrifice
what ever it will be

written by mdn481 on saturday 21st march 2010 at 12.15

well, let's talk about the title first
I Really like it
It pushed me to open the topic and before looking to the autor
I was sure that it was for you

The poem is well organized especially the rhyms
but the ideas are bit misunderstandable

cause, if we talk about feelings
you said your heart is not for sale
but in the begining, you said i bought a love
do you think that we should use this descption for heart or love
do you think that love or heart are avalaible for buying and sale??

Jane a écrit:

well, let's talk about the title first
I Really like it
It pushed me to open the topic and before looking to the autor
I was sure that it was for you

The poem is well organized especially the rhyms
but the ideas are bit misunderstandable

cause, if we talk about feelings
you said your heart is not for sale
but in the begining, you said i bought a love
do you think that we should use this descption for heart or love
do you think that love or heart are avalaible for buying and sale??

i thank so much jane for that review...I love that

Explaination : You should read the description of the poem ""hommage à la dignité humaine"" or in english "" A tribute to the humain dignity"" ,et bein oui JANE hearts are for sale now ,i mean by heart : feelings not as an organ lol ,people are buying others heart with money or something else....I wanted to send a message through this poem for whom love costs a price ,for material people...this my message

I hope u understand me ...If poet give the message so clear there will be no weight for the poem ,sometimes poet must give it between lines to push people to learn the lesson ,to attract their attention I'm sur you understand me here

I thank you so much again ,keep on shining on my poems JANE

MDN481 a écrit:

Jane a écrit:

well, let's talk about the title first
I Really like it
It pushed me to open the topic and before looking to the autor
I was sure that it was for you

The poem is well organized especially the rhyms
but the ideas are bit misunderstandable

cause, if we talk about feelings
you said your heart is not for sale
but in the begining, you said i bought a love
do you think that we should use this descption for heart or love
do you think that love or heart are avalaible for buying and sale??

I hope u understand me ...If poet give the message so clear there will be no weight for the poem ,sometimes poet must give it between lines to push people to learn the lesson ,to attract their attention I'm sur you understand me here

Here, I understand you very well!!!
keep writting!!

Jane a écrit:

MDN481 a écrit:

I hope u understand me ...If poet give the message so clear there will be no weight for the poem ,sometimes poet must give it between lines to push people to learn the lesson ,to attract their attention I'm sur you understand me here

Here, I understand you very well!!!
keep writting!!

so I'm happy ,tnx